Much much better. Great job on the vocals and your guitar playing. The recording quality was a step up.
You're getting better all the time. Again, please take a songwriting course as it will help. And cowrite with other!
A good job singing this. There was an off note here and there. Considering lack of real equipment you did well.
Keep working on your songwriting...you'll get better at crafting a complete song!
Nice sound overall. I liked your intro...kind of reminded me of "Here Comes the Sun" for a few notes...
Your voice has a nice quality. I could hear a bit of a reach or change in texture when going up a register, I think some studio or effects would help, i.e. compression, eq. But I really like your voice.
The lyrics needs some work but you may be new to songwriting. I would look at some courses on songwriting that will help you connect with the listener and have your song be complete from start to finish.
The chorus was good though.
You are young and so you will continue to improve. Good job. I will not lie and give you a 5 like everyone else on this site routinely does. That is an insult to those whose compositions are worth a higher mark. But also if you get a 5 for the level you are at what do you have to strive for. I think most people who rate are lazy, in a hurry, or worry about feelings to the degree they do a disservice to you and other songwriters. But I do think you did agood job!
Very nice recording. The guitar really sounds good. The vocal recording here is much cleaner and sounds great with the guitar. The balance is very pleasing.
Very nice progression and it fits the lyrics well. The guitar performance is good and the sound is nicely recorded. You have a very good voice, however on this track is sounds a little lost in the mix.
The progression is very nice and the guitar performance is good. You have a very pleasing voice and style. Acoustic guitar and solo voice is always a good combination.
The lyrics are good as is your vocal delivery. You might want to stand a little further from the mic when recording your vocals to avoid the slight bit of distortion in your recording. Just a thought!
Nice voice, but it is overshadowed by the guitar on this. The vocal would present this tune much better if the guitar was quieter in the mix.
has a bit of Avril Lavigne about this track. i hope thats not a insult lol
Good style. i liked the lyrical theme and lyrics.
the guitar was good and vocals . obviously the production is not the best but with a studio and more backing this would be a great song.
but for just guitar and vocals it shows the potential of what the song is a about.
Nice voice, though it strays a few times. The song sounds a bit on the ad-libbed side towards the end. Needs tightening up and a bit more structure. Not a bad effort, though. Best of luck.
The song is good, the sound is good the guitar well played... just need some more concentration controlling your voice. Good luck!