The good first...
1. Music is okay
2. Your ability to write is very good, in spite of your misspellings
In your profile you write "death before dishonor" which sounds quite nice; however, your song, like a lot of rap, uses much vulgarity and cursing which does not further your message. It only shuts down. While I am not above throwing a curse word out in anger, I try not to.
But in the end the Bible and God tells us we will all be accountable for every word that comes forth from our mouths when we stand before Him on judgment day.
But the worse thing in your "song" or rant is that you are quite racist. Black, whites, yellow, brown all can be racist. In this world we should learn to love one another not hate.
For you to write your filthy, hate filled lyrics using phrases such as
" NO HOPPIN' DEAD BEAT USELESS FUCK JUST REMEMBER NOT
EVERYONE'S BORN WITH A SILVER SPOON LIKE YOU WHITE COLLOR CUNTS"
serves no purpose except to propagate hate and anger.
I am partially white and I have suffered from the effects of racism and hate. Plus, I was not born with a silver spoon in mouth. And I now plenty of people of all races, including whites, who are born in less fortunate situations than you will ever know.
And still many poor inner city races of all kinds have risen above crime and drugs.
so you may choose to hate and blame, but please look inward and self-assess, and then turn to God and He will give you strength to grow and find peace and strength.
I will pray for you because I do not know your personal situation. But please do not continue to perform this hate filled composition.
You are quite talented and can write something that offers hope not hate.
Best of luck going forward. If you wish to work together on something or want some advice I will be glad to help my friend.
Comment Written by Jimi Seven on 23-Nov-2017