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Numi

She's There by Rob Rideout



The Captain of Cliche again! But just the same, this could work with some luck in the right hands... and I'm thinking now that you could make it with some luck, and in the right hands... (and I little good influence spirit-wise)... your son on the sax... did I review this already? I remember a song with the son playing the sax, or was that another wone? Well, you can put all my comments together, then... if I did a third it would probably say something else, too... (meaning how a song is perceived depends on a lot of things)...
This one is like your others - ballad, country-like... keep 'em churnin' until they're burnin'...
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

Fai fai Eazy by kamacosmic



Stevie Wonder on harmonica... with smooth R&B mixed with rap... and then you get reggae in he chorus... then that non-English language - sounds... Aborigine... so you are good in several genres, and you mix them all... and if you do enough of them you'll create your own genre... nice backing vocals... not studio equipment, so a pro would have to take it further... your voice and the harmonies are radio-grade, so this piece could make it, if... if it has that 'magic', and you just missed...! Try it again with more variations in dynamics... and slight tempo changes... (which means you'll have to do live instruments rather than synthesized)...
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

Drive Me To Drink by rondo2012



Dumbed-down cliche lyrics for that particular market... this is 'industry' music, so a pro could do something with it and make you both some money... your recording is demo-grade, so don't expect radio play for it...! Nice harmonies... clean rendition, if it were me it would have been take 100 or so... lol ah, I see your author's notes... yes, it is a good driving song, in the spirit of Eddie Rabbit's "Drivin' My Life Away"
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

Now I'm Old by Rob Rideout



Ah, you again - so what I did was begin reading your lyrics - which must mean that is a strong point of yours...
Cliche lyrics, again, but you do focus on the central point, which is also cliche... but that isn't necessarily a bad thing - if it clicks with an artist and the recording clicks then it will hit... If I were a pro attempting this song what would I do... maybe play with the lyrics to 'uncliche' them here and there, maybe make the lyrics 'my own' by bending them to my experiences, so I could draw more feeling from it when performing it...
Your two songs today have an experienced feel - like you've been writing cliche songs for a while now, specifically for the industry, specifically to make money, which does lower their artistic quality... kind of like bleaching bread... (yes, I am pushing you to be more original, and to be less mindful of what the industry wants, but not if it means you starve!)
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

This Joint by Eon Mallett



The title evokes smoking something... or it could be more abstract...
This piece is outside of any genre, so it's commercial potential is nill... it has some artistic potential... in a minimalist sense (no key modulations or dynamics or tempo variations)... it's programmed, so it lacks emotional expression... the delight is in the structure and patterns and interplay, which is repetitive, and which didn't bother me, so it works...
The title is non-description, and this piece would be hard to search for; a more helpful (and memorable) title would be "What Does This Knob Do"...
I heard four pieces during my comment session, and three were programmed, and the technology sounded just like yours... so there must be some kind of popular software out there that makes this easy for people just starting to try it out (which this piece sounds like)... so your competitive edge in such a crowded field would be your taste and sensibilities, which is what you want to be developing, since your skills are on par with most others just starting out...
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

The Party is in My Mind by Rob Rideout



Slow, strumming guitar... older voice... fake vibrato! lol (I'm against it in a general sense - let the emotions create it, I say)...
A sentimental piece aka what's his name... ummm... hmmm... why do I have a sudden mental block...?! Willy Nelson (you have his voice)...
It sounds like cliche lyrics - as if you've cut and pasted from several sources... but then reading the lyrics I see they do address the topic directly without consciously borrowing from outside songs...
I do like the title - it matches the sentiment of the piece... nice piano at the end...
So kind of a country blues ballad piece in a 50's or 60's vein... and I can see a pro doing something with this (your voice and playing 'demo-grade'), so I'd say it does have a chance at success... I'm not too familiar with that market, though I've spent some time there, getting the feel of it... yet I'd say it's success depends on what an artist does with it, which is hit-or-miss... so the best wish I can give this piece is 'good luck'! Because that's really all that remains... I think the song is 'there' and ready..
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

Allegiance by Resven



Begins as if a child is playing around on a toy... then the orchestration kicks in... it is a programmed piece - so it lacks dynamics and tempo variations, which express emotion, so the piece has no emotion - it is pure intellect... but you intend it for dance - so you give it a dance beat - thump thump thump... and then you experiment with various effects which are variations on what others have been doing for 20-30 years or so...
If a professional were to do something with this it may work (your current budget equipment is demo-grade only); the only thing he'd have to work with would be the chord changes, the beat and tempo are pre-select standard... and if the chord changes are standard, too (I wouldn't know - I'm not too familiar with dance music), then this piece wouldn't have anything to offer in that direction... as a stand-alone piece I ask myself where it takes me - does it take my imagination to a club? It kind of did, but not too strongly... it was good for a beginner, however, and if you are, then keep at it - a lot of your success depends on luck (and we can make our own)...!
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

Love Life by Lady moosS



Water sound effects... acoustic guitar-like instrument, sounds programmed... midi... traditional, octaves in piano... definitely programmed... picks up with synth orchestration... harpsichord-like instrument takes the rhythm lead... second heavy part - now it sounds like you're having some synthesized fun...! Very budget equipment (like me!)... nice chord changes and melody and harmony (but way too 'safe' and traditional for my tastes)... what would connect this piece with any listener, no matter what their tastes, is spirit and mood... but this being a very safe programmed piece has obscured those aspects - speed and dynamic changes express those best (within a varied timber setting, which has its own expressions), and this piece doesn't have speed or dynamic expression; what is left is 'structure', which is interesting, but one-dimensional; so if I were to improve it it would be in the areas above... the quality of your equipment should be your last concern, so don't worry about that - what matters is in your head, and your heart, if you can express it... developing a musical mind is more important than spending money on equipment upgrades... so that's the direction I would go if I were you...
Comment Written by Numi on 23-Mar-2012

Ease My Mind by Candlelight



Well! Small world! Your voice is getting smoother and softer - a nice direction... no fake vibrato, try for natural... this is a ballad, and it can take many directions - orchestrated or not orchestrated, solo or duo or group singing... and subject to many variations...

The lyrics and song should work on whoever it is you find comfort with on the phone, and that person would be thrilled to know what you've confessed here... unless this is a general piece, then it's a harder sell!


Comment Written by Numi on 20-Mar-2012
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Still Sleeping by Eon Mallett



Initially I thought 'this isn't music, it is button-pushing'... but even then it all comes down to what you do with it, meaning it comes down to taste and sensibilities...

The intro development needs to move faster - it seems to be going somewhere, but lagging way too long... it lacks dynamics - which means a lack of dynamic interest... the drums are canned, you should add a live touch, some actual artistry there...

It is original, though it lacks 'punch'... it seems programmed... which doesn't necessarily have to be a negative thing...
Comment Written by Numi on 20-Mar-2012


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