Really? What is this supposed to be? It continue to amaze me how thse SONGs be put outa there and we are expect to grade them on the finesses pf recording when this is loud and ravolting ofennsive words. If mission is tio simply shock peoples well you did it masterfuly.
I would not play this on my front porch for little kids who trick or treat.
But as far as efort, you did very good. Somtimes efort trumps the quality of the actual music. I do your kinda music in my band and I can send you somethin that may help you compose with more confidence.
I do commend your try though. It reminds me of how i started out. So dont be discourage and keep pluging away.