nice work. i love the rhythm of this song. there is an element of seriousness in your vocals in this song compared to the last one i reviewed. i sense improvement. there is emotion in your vocals, you sang as if you meant it and for the first time it wa believeable. however the chorus of this song is the sour point it sounded like something fabricated in a hurry and it dampens the smooth flow of this song. thats the only hitch here. if you can find another melody for the chorus, something that has the same if not more emotional touch than the verse. if you do so reply this review telling me so and i will reassess for a possible 5 star. you are that close my friend. good job and keep it up.