Hmm. Nice effort.
I like the lyrics, but it all seems slightly off to me.
I have to say that I liked the other song of yours that I reviewed much better.
I think it's the shakeiness of the vocals at the beginning of the song.
The hook sounds a little off-key. Wouldn't mind hearing this song redone.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the artist on 19-Sep-2012
thank you very much,your advice is good and well taken
When I was young I loved "Dead Kennedys", "Stranglers" "PIL". Love them now too, as well as I like today's post punk rock. Your idea of the song is very nice. Vocals are very good for punk style, but instrumental background is too weak. With better arranged background you can make a candy from this song :)